学员案例 | 1+1>2的文书是怎样写出来的!

发布于 2021-02-26 17:31

在这里先祝贺同学们都拿到了不错的offer!在这段时间里,同学们积极配合文书老师头脑风暴,使得文书的进展十分的顺利。整个申请过程也是其乐融融,以下是几位同学申请中的精彩片段:


孙同学


毕业院校:西南民族大学(双非院校)

专业:经济学

GPA:3.84

实习经历:知名会计师事务所实习经历

获奖经历:多次获得奖学金、优秀学生称号

其他:大学生创新创业项目、支援乡村经济建设项目


Offer斩获

University College Dublin (2021 QS排名177) -MSc Behavioural Economics


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In addition to the great gains from classes, I also participated in a series of projects and research activities to obtain a more visual understanding of knowledge acquired. The most impressive one is my participation in undergraduate innovation and entrepreneurship activity. In order to study the domestic household service industry, we, taking Chengdu as an example, made a lot of efforts from the initial choice of the topic to the design of the questionnaire to obtain research data, then to the investigation, and finally, to data analysis and interpretation. In this process, we encountered many difficulties, such as the scientific design of the questionnaires, the representative selection of investigation targets, the objectivity of data interpretation and method adoption. In the end, after continuous revision and improvement, we successfully completed the analysis of the current situation and existing problems of the household service industry in Chengdu and came up with suggested solutions, with papers published. This one-year project allowed me to apply the statistical knowledge and economic analysis methods I learned in practice, and also enabled me to realize the positive value economics bring to the society-through analysis of economic behaviours, solving economic problems and promoting the healthy development of society.

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该段从学生做的课外项目入手,通过具体案例展示了学生的创新领导能力,团队合作能力以及解决困难的能力。同时通过详述项目的具体工作内容充分体现了学生数据分析以及经济形势分析能力,生动形象地展示给招生官学生所具备的学习经济学方面的潜力与特质。

However, although involving a wide range of disciplines, the undergraduate education is a little bit theoretical and dated. For example, in the International Finance course, the teacher always self-refuted that the theories taught could not be fully applied in practice due to time lag, strategic delays, etc. Therefore, I hope I can continue my postgraduate studies to acquire more novel and cutting-edge economics knowledge at this stage.

02

该段通过点出学生意识到本科阶段所学的不足与欠缺,进而想要继续学习更全面先进的经济学知识,充分体现了学生的逆向思维,独特视角,以及不断进取的特质,展示出学生看问题很全面,懂得辩证地分析利与弊,明确知道自己需要什么,想要实现什么目标。

崔同学

毕业院校:电子科技大学(985、211院校)

专业:测控技术与仪器

GPA:3.32

实习经历:联通及大型医药公司通信技术实习经历

获奖经历:获奖经历丰富,包括国家级、院校级、志愿者证书等

其他:相关项目研究经历、赴日英项目交换经历、课外活动经历丰富,组织能力强。


Offer斩获

King’s College London (2021 QS排名31, Times本地排名30) -MSc Electronic Engineering with ManagementUniversity of Glasgow (2021 QS排名77, Times本地排名14)-MSc Sensor and Imaging Systems


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UESTC, being hailed as “the pacesetter of China’s electronic technology”, has made notable contributions to its rapid development by carrying out leading-edge scientific research and cultivating top talents. Majoring in Measurement and Control Technology and Instrumentation at UESTC, I have the privilege of receiving the top-notch and multidisciplinary training in precision machinery, electronics, circuit, optics, automatic control, computer and information technology. And, the systematic study of advanced mathematics has trained my logical thinking. In academic study and practice, I learned the principles of A/D conversion and built some instrument test systems through high-speed ADC to achieve accurate measurement of signals. During this process, I became infatuated with digital signal processing, acquired the know-how of DTFT, Z-transform and FFT, and completed the design of a digital filter independently, laying a well-knit foundation for my further study.

01

该段逻辑清晰,层层递进,表意明确,用词准确。通过点出学生本科院校在电子科技领域的地位, 进而罗列出学生在学校学到的电子科技相关的专业知识,充分说明了学生学习电子工程的强硬专业背景。结合学生的课后实践,将所学到的知识学以致用,并接触到新的电子科技相关领域,拓宽了学生的知识层面和技术要领,突出了学生继续深造的坚实基础。

Winning the National First Prize in the National Science and Technology Innovation Competition for College Students has set up my confidence to quest for advanced study. At the end of 2019, I started the research on the application of digital electronic technology in the communication network. Initially, I consulted numerous references to analyze the characteristics of digital electronic technology, including the security and strong anti-interference of digital signal storage, low power consumption and cost of digital electronic technology, and the integration and miniaturization of digital equipment. Then, I explored the application of digital electronic technology from three aspects: signal conversion, signal processing, and transmission and processing of network information. Last, I analyzed the application advantages, status, and trends of digital electronic technology in the communication network. By observing and practising how the digital equipment is composed and how it works in the laboratory, I achieved the combination of practice and theory. This research experience has offered me a deep comprehension of electronic engineering, especially in communication, and an unprecedented sense of fulfilment, encouraging me to explore this domain in depth.

02

该段落将学生丰富的获奖经历和课外活动经历抽丝剥茧,选取了学生国家级技术创新一等奖经历和数字电子技术的研究经历,充分展示了学生的创新能力以及电子技术领域的研究能力, 这两项能力是众多院校很看中的实践技能,该段落突出学生亮点,使文书增色不少。此外,倒装句的使用突出句子重点,让招生官一眼看到重要信息,做出准确判断。





吕同学

毕业院校:四川大学(985、211院校)

专业:电子信息工程

GPA:3.06

实习经历:软件公司技术支持

获奖经历:校内获奖经历丰富

其他:系统设计研究经历丰富、院系电子科技园副主席


Offer斩获

University of Bristol (2021 QS排名58, Times本地排名13) -MSc Wireless Communications and Signal Processing

University of Glasgow (2021 QS排名77, Times本地排名14)-MSc Electronics and Electrical Engineering


PS优秀片段展示

The previous education makes me deeply aware of the significance and precision of communication and signal processing. Each factor in this process is unignorable stretching from modulation, channel transmission, to demodulation as each petty detail matters much in the final outcome. That also gives me a more professional understanding of the most popular 5G boom, the production of communication technology. Many countries have pumped money into developing and establishing 5G base stations. Some even launch R&D of 6G because the highest communication efficiency and leading-edge technology will usher in a more rapid development speed. View from current research trend, communication and signal processing play a major part in the social and technological growth today and tomorrow. It stimulates me to be a part of it to see the game-changing development led by this technology.

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该段先点出学生的教育背景使其意识到通信与信号处理的重要性,进而挖掘出学生从通信与信号处理延伸到对5G通信的研究与探讨,结合实际案例证明了通信与信号处理的重要性以及学生学生致力于探索该领域的兴趣与决心。结合5G的实际案例充分展示了学生审时度势,与时俱进,目光长远的特点。 

After completing my master’s degree, I want to join companies like Huawei or Qualcomm and engage in cutting-edge technology projects in communications. I hope that I can conduct communications research and manufacture high-efficiency communications modules that can be mass-produced. The communications industry has gain worldwide attention, especially in China, where there are already tens of millions of 5G users and hundreds of thousands of 5G base stations. But the technologies we have are not mature enough as we are too dependent on foreign precision equipment. In the near future, I hope we can gain momentum in independent R&D. I pile hopes on my graduate studies, and I hope it can empower me to contribute my part to this cause.

02

该段落描述学生的职业规划,明确的目标企业表明了学生对自己的人生目标和规划有准确的认识。再点出学生对该行业的发展前景以及技术发展现状的认识,展现了学生的独特视角,同时充分说明了学生的学习目标以及职业目标。

这几位同学整个申请流程下来十分的流畅,老师和学员的通力配合,努力就会有回报。希望同学们在以后的留学生涯中,实现自己的人生理想。




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